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Post by Sunshine on Jul 13, 2005 15:25:32 GMT -5
Aww thansk for the suggestions roger, but when push comes to shove people co-write. :\
I'm not thrilled but we rewrote unlike you... I'll post the whole lyrics on. Thanks guys gotta go
Never step in puddles, -Sunny
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Post by musiclover28463 on Jul 13, 2005 21:28:41 GMT -5
Well its easy for me to make little suggestions/changes, tweak it if u will. Nothing like trying to write a WHOLE song 471
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Post by Laura Chow on Jul 14, 2005 16:06:02 GMT -5
dang it! *hits head* I haven't give you my suggestions yet. I promise I will.
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Post by musiclover28463 on Jul 14, 2005 19:29:57 GMT -5
< like that ;D ... I haven't give you my suggestions yet. I promise I will. I noticed that but just let u say it 474
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Post by Sunshine on Jul 15, 2005 22:52:00 GMT -5
suggestion for today is still open..not..right yet.
Drink water..not mud, -Sunny
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Post by Sunshine on Aug 2, 2005 15:18:06 GMT -5
Hey guys! Thanks Roger for posting on my boards...a few weeks ago. Much love I posted there too about what's going to happened. A lot of things changed. Laura your suggestion for the song would still be good *knudge* sorry i haven't been able to be on as much or post as much, but I will soon after Summer school is over. Thanks guys. I SHALL be back -Sunny
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Post by Laura Chow on Aug 2, 2005 22:29:54 GMT -5
I'm so sorry Sunny.. I haven't spent a whole lot time on the internet so it was pretty hard for me to do a long comment so here's what I have to say. (I have 2 windows up by the way) Alrightee.. my first impression of the lyrics without the melody yet is it's simple but it's like an awareness song. It doesn't seem like a radio friendly song but it depends. I'm in a different mood now and have more time to think this through. It can be a great song becoz people needs some like this now.. can't have too much songs about love and getting out of love. It's about time to have a song like this to make people realize reality instead of staying in fantasy. That's good but it's not always good. Although Today wasn't mentioned as many times in the song for it to be the title, I still think that it can be catchy. I like how it ends though coz it ends with today. I like the phrase, "What you have is today". I kinda think I made it on my own. I don't know and I didn't bother to goggle it out. lol. Anyways, I think Today is a great title although the word isn't mentioned as much. Alright.. here's my comment about the content of the writing: When you wrote 'I realized I'm the only one' what did you mean by that? coz it clashes with the others. You wrote 'we' after that. I would generalize this song becoz people have to realize that it's their responsibility. This song is gonna be like.. telling people 'hey, you gotta wake up.. don't stay in the fantasy world'. Tell me about that. Overall, the lyrics is great becoz it's about making the difference first instead of waiting for difference to appear. I've been hearing the phrase 'If you wanna change your surroundings, you must first change yourself'. So, for a song like this.. I'd totally love. It's about time people start realizing things that are happening around. How many times have I said that? lol. Anyway, if you can.. add more words to it and generalize it. Picture yourself as the listener of a radio station.. what do you wanna hear.. what can you reflect out of the song.. what realization would you have.. would you start making an effort to make the world a better place by starting from your home? your heart? your loved ones? Put yourself in somebody's boots for a moment and put those expressions and words in your song. So there.. that's my long long comment on your lyrics. lol. If you have the melody already, it'll be great if you can preview for us to listen.. even if it's gonna be just a riff or two. Take care Sunny. It's okay that you haven't been hanging out here often. I post on your boards at times but you haven't posted much on there either. I have it bookmarked by the way. Love ya, Laura
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Post by musiclover28463 on Aug 3, 2005 0:29:47 GMT -5
Hey guys! Thanks Roger for posting on my boards...a few weeks ago. Much love ... I SHALL be back -Sunny yw
hurry back now ya' hear 520
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Post by Sunshine on Aug 3, 2005 0:37:13 GMT -5
Thanks for the advice Laura. A friend of mine sorda re-wrote it and soon i'm gonna change a bunch of things. I'm, however, NOT gonna say Today until the end. I feel like it gives it more push, it really speaks out at the end. Thanks for your advice. I'll re-write it again with your suggestions and input. Alright gotta go. Oh laura! Did you ever get fruity loops? I just got it back and goodness..it's amazing what you can do. Dance music = the best. Eat Eggs...it makes you fart, -Sunny
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Post by musiclover28463 on Aug 3, 2005 0:41:02 GMT -5
... Picture yourself as the listener of a radio station.. what do you wanna hear.. what can you reflect out of the song.. what realization would you have.. would you start making an effort to make the world a better place by starting from your home? your heart? your loved ones? Put yourself in somebody's boots for a moment and put those expressions and words in your song. ... ^Hmmm interesting Laura its too late to say any more. I'll haveta go back and read the lyrics again, myself 521
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